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    (Salam every one,, may ap sab ko aik bat btana chahta hon.. k ye just aik story hi,, its not the reality aur na he koi imagination hi,, is just a Story, aur ye meri life ke 1st story hi, means pehly koshish,, ab ap ko kesi lagi,, zaroor btana)




    UF k sab dosto ko sab say pehly to salam pesh karna chaho ga, is umeed k sath k ap sab theek hony k sath sath thak b hon gay ,,,,, ab my ap ko apny bary may thora sa taruf karwata chalo, name to mera Sameer Gujjar hy, per jesa k ap sab janty he hi k aj kal Pakistan film industry my mohtarma Naseebo LaL Sahiba ny jo Baladkar lafz Gujjar k sath karna start keya hi tab say kuch ajeeb c sharmidagi c hoti hi khud ko gujjar kehty howe, k esy he kissi ko pata chaly k my gujjar hon to koi Sar-e-Aam he Kutt k Japhi panny ke farmaysh kar betha to meri to izzat ka sift Faloda he ni, Totti Fruity aur Vanilla wagera sab nikalny ke umeed hi, to issi ihteyat ko malkhooz e khatir rakhty howe jaha my ny apny name k sath Gujjar hataya, sath he Sameer ko Sam b kar deya, may UAE k aik Emirate Al-Ajman k university may MBA ka talib-e-Ilm hon, jaha dono type ke MBA ke taleem milti hi,, aik ke to pesy deny party hi aur dusri free me milti hi,, jis MBA k pesy deny party hi wo to hi Master of Business and Administration aur dusara jo free my hi wo hy “Maha Begairati and Awara Gardi,

    Mera sex ka experience kabi b shandar ni raha.. hamesha jo b keya ulta he how.. is may ap kuch meri Damag ka Chemical Locha b keh sakty ho, q k hamesha say he mujy ulti sedhi try karny ka bohot shook raha,, per sex k mamly my jo b try ke.. us try ny mujy esa try keya k may Turny k kabil ni raha,,, q k may hamesha her larki ya aurat ko meli ankh say ni dekha,, her kisi sinf-e-nazuk ko hamesha kissi dusary ke maa behen he samja, meri sharafat ke inteha ap ye dekh lay,, k dusari nazar to hamesha dalta he ni,, aik bar may he usy itna dekh leta k wo gussy say moo dusari taraf kar leti ,, khair,, is leye larki ka apun k passs to koi chance tha ni.. to khud say he ulty sedhy tajarbat karna mera dil pasand mashgla tha,
    Aik bat aik English movie Amarican Pie dekhi, us k start k scene ny mera dil mooh leya jis may aik khoo baroo nojawan aik Apple pie ka baladkar karny ke koshish karta hy,, us scene ko koi 15 bar rewind kar k dekhny k bad my foran market geya aur aik apple pie lay k aaya, apny Babu Rao ke minnat samajat ke to wo apple pie to Standing Avetion deny ko teyar howa to seedha usy Pie may ghusadeya, us wakt muj pe ye hakekat ashkar hoi, k agar Pie upper say Thanda hi to lazmi ni k wo andar say b utna he thanda ho, umeed hi ap samaj gay ho gay k mery sath howa kia, 3 din tak hostel k kamry my lungi pehen k babo rao ko Tooth paste ka massage kar k ghomta raha, k q us Na muraaad badbakht pie ny mujy pent kia underwear peheny k kabil b ni chora tha,,

    Aik bar aur my kisssi aur tariky ke khooj my justajoo kar raha tha k socha,, k yar kabi condom try ni keya.. larki to pata ni apni kismet my kab ho ge, condom to dekhy k hota kesa hi,, foran bhag k aik medical store pe geya, aik condom ka packet uthaya, us pe Strawberry Flavor likha tha, payment kary k jab baki peso k intezar may tha to bila irada he check karny k leye my ny packet ko songha , acha laga, aik bat aur zoooor say songha, bohot acha laga,, tesari bar songany ke teyari my he tha to ye hakekat pata chali k kuch mushtandy type k arbi meri taraf gandi gandi nazroo say dekh rahy hi, aik ke to ankho my wo chamak dekhai de to munni ko badnam hony say pehly us zalim insane ke ankho my dikhi ho ge jis ny usy badnam keya, to my ny socha k beta Sam is say pehly k aik aur song Gujjar baradri pe bany “Gujjar badnam howa, Zalima tery leye” to nikal ja,, my ny apny baki leny wali 4 Dhs pe 3 harf bhejy jis ko bhejny my kaffi himmat jama karna pari, aur my nikal bhaga, aur room pe ja k he sakoon ka sans leya, room ka darwaza foran lock keya, aur aik Naazeba Harkat ke English movie laga k apny Mohtaram Janab Babu Rao sahib k neend ke agooosh say nikalny ka intezar karny laga, jesy he Babu rao ny pehly angrai le meri ankho my aik nai tajarby ke chamak jagi,, jab Babu rao kissi foji jawan ke tarha full Tan tana geya to my ny phatak say Condom ko khola, phely aik bar phir usy songa,, phir dil he dil my apny ap ko aik galeez gali say nawaza k beta ye shooq na he palo to acha hi, to je bhai log, may ny foran he condom ko full tight carha leya, aur meri hatheli babu rao ke upper say nechy tak safar tay karny lagi, yaaaaaar sachi my.. maza aaya.. na koi teel lagana para na koi soup, aur maza b full type ka, jesy jesy maza ata geya hatheli ke rafter bharti gay phir mujy laga k babu rao ko ulti any ka imkanat hi to my ny hatheli ke speed aur teez kar de, aur jesy he ulti ka pehla katra bahir nikla mujy laga k jesy kissi ny meri babu rao k choty say sorakh my 5 inch moti koi cheez ghosair de, dard itna k uffffffffff na pocho, may ny foran condom ko utara aur zameen pe gir geya, dard itna k bardasht say bahir, 5 mint bad kuch sakoon howa,, thori safai k bad shorts pehni aur dekha Doctor k pass poncha, ***** bhala kary k hamary ider aik Pakistani Doctor hy jis say thori bohot Frankness hi k khull k aur agar majboori b hoi to khool k problem bta sakta tha, to je may Doctor Faisal b pass pohoncha,, oooooooooo,,, ye wo UF wally Doctor faisal ni.,, ye dusary Faisal hy,, to jab my ny uder ja k apni dukh aur dard bhari aap bheti Doctor k goshguzar ke to pehly to wo hassa aur phir mujy sedha he shorts utarny ko kaha, my ny request ke k pehly apni is nurse ko to bahir bhejo, wo hass k bola ,, tum tension na lo aur jo kehta hon karo,, may ny un k hukam ko sar ankho pe rakhty howe foran he shorts nechy sarka de to us Doctor ny meri shaan my kuch nazeba alfaz ka izafa karty howe farmaya k ooo Akal k dushman ider open air he ni ander checkup room my jaa k, may ny apny left aur right khari munkar nakeer jesi nurses ko hasta paya to thora sharminda hony ke nakam koshish karty howe checkup room ka rukh keya aur andar jaty he apni shorts utar ka lait geya, doctor ny aa k mera checkup start keya jis say mujy maza any laga aur babu rao angaraiya leny laga, jis say nurse k chehry pe muskurahat aur meri chehry pe sharmindagi any lagi k kahi sar e aam he meri izat ke nelami start na ho gay, mery kano my phir say wo song chalny laga “Gujjar badnam howa, Zalima tery leye” may apny he kheyalo my tha k Doctor may mery sar pe aik adad Thapar raseed keya aur kaha k utho ab, aur may hoosh ke duniya may wapis aya, doctor k mutabic mera babu rao to bilkul fit fatak hi to phir pain ke waja kia bani.. k achanak he bola.. k oyee Sam,., tum ny condom charhaya kesy tha.. my ny bolo jesy charhaty hi.. us ny mujy aik condom deya aur bola k chal isy charha k bta. Mujy phely to thori sharam aye.. phir sharam ko thora side pe karty howe babu rao ko Telepathy k zareye messages bejny laga k utha jawana,, gujja ka imtehan hy aj,, babu rao ke gairat ny josh mara aur doctor ko salami pesh karny laga to my ny foran doctor ka deya geya condom charhany laga to achanak dil keya k condom smell keya jay,, per dimag ny mery dil ke mother sister ke shan my kuch gustakhana alfaz ka istimal karty howe phir kaha k gujjar,, badnam na ho janaa,, to apny is irady to tark karty howe condom ko full patak kar k tana tan charhan deya.. to doctor is zoor say hassa jesy mery babo rao per koi tharki type ka joke likha hi, phir us ny kaha k oyee akal k dushman,, is tarha charhay ga to esa to ho ga he na, phir doctor k btany pe muj pe ye hakekat khuli k jesy movies may condom pe agy thora sa hissa chora jata hi wo issi leye hota hi k babo rao k ulti nikalny k leye jaga ho wagar full meri tarha zoor azmai kar k tight kar deya jay to pain hona Lazim o malzoom hy,

    Ye sab parny ka bad ap log ye hargiz na sochna k meri sex life esi he rahi,, ni je ni,, her kissi ke tarha muj pe b kismet ke devi meherban hoi aur mujy aik adad .. oooh ni ni,.. kafi zeyada tadad my Pussy naseeb hoi,,,

    Ab meri kissmat ke pussy mujy kab kesy aur kaha milli.. ye to my ap ko agli kist may he btao ga,,
    Apny comment say zaroor nawazna,, aur sachi sachi btana k meri Dukhi dastan nay ap ko b dukhi keya na?

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    Wah je wah mery dost
    MYTH, tumhari yea mazah sey bhurpoor kahani ko padh ker bahut lutf aaya dost.


    Abb juldi juldi apni agli pichli sari karastaaniyan bhi doston sey share kerna shoro ker du dear.

    Thanks!

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    Thanks Dear Bht AcHi KahanI LiKhi Hai ,

    MazeeD Bhi PoSt KartY Rahna

    Good WoRk

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    Sab Dosto aur dostio ko sab say pehly to my aik peyar bhara Salam pesh karna chaho ga,,, aur us k bad un logo ka shukriya ada karo ga jino ny meri story pasand ke, aur jin ko pasand ni yar,,,,,,, chalo koi bat ni .. maskeen banda dwa he kar sakta hi

    To jee,,,, atty hi ab apni dukho bhari dastan-e-hayat ke taraf,,, oooo ap log ye na samaj bethna k ye kiaa Hayaat sahib ke dastan hi. Hayat ka matlab meri zindagi ke dastan,. Yaar ap log b na , chalo koi bat ni choro,, haa je, to my bta raha tha,, k apny chand tajarbat infect kafii tajarbat ke bharpoor nakami k bad my ny faisila keya, k beta Sam, kuch dino tak 3rd semester finish hony wala hy, to thora dehan parhai ke taraf dena chaheye, to my ny sar joor k sab nazeba harakat ke English aur desi CDs sambhal k ghulaf charha k full izzat aur respect k sath sambhal k rakh de, ta k sanad rahy aur bawakt e zaroorat kam aye, aur apni parhai pe zoor deny laga, aksar aukat Mr. Babu Rao sahib class ke kesi sunder c bary bary Atomic energy k khazano say bharpoor naari ko dekh k angrai lety rehty, per un ko phir samjana parta k janab kuch din sabar karo, phir ap k leye koi na koi sunder c parking ka intezam pakka karo ga, bechary babu rao jee aksar aukat maan jaty.. per raat ke kathin tanhai my aksar aukat apny dil ke hatho baykabo hoty howe ansoo bahany lagty, jis ke waja say mujy uth k nahana parta aur kapry change b karny pary
    Akhir kar wo din aaya, k hammy pory 1 month ke vacations ho gay, pehly week to bas aik he kam hota tha, k din bhar sona aur sari raat dosto k sath Whiskey enjoy karma, kahi say ye khabar mery chacha hazoor tak jaa pohonchy jo k Dubai my hoty hi k un ka masoom say bhatejy ko aj kal vacations chal rahy hi, aur un ko pareshani laahaq ho gay k kahi un ka bhateja tanhai k azab say he na guzar raha ho, to uno ny mujy bulawa bheja k baki ke vacations Dubai my guzaro, mujy b kafi din ho gay thy Dubai gay to my foran he teyar ho geya, aur Janab Babu Rao jee say wada keya k is bar ho na ho Dubai my ap k leye parking ka intezam kar k raho ga chahy us k leye kissi kay pero my gir k bheek he q na mangni pary k “ B.B tery bachy jeye.,, agar bachy ni to jo jo tum say bach gay hi wo sab jeye, bas aik Phuddi ka sawal hi, gareeb dwain day gaa” mera ye wada sun ke Babu Rao je itny khush howe k uchal uchal k khushi manany lagy, jab un ko zara peyar say samja buja k bethaya wo aik do ulti kar k beth gay,

    Jab my ny apny sab dosto ko apna Dubai jany ka plan btaya to mujy is shart pe Dubai ke ijazat milly k ajj raat ke party mujy deni pary ge, aur mery he room my ho ge, sab kharcha muj maskeen ke mazoor kandho pe aana tha,, aur ap ko to pata he hi k ye dost sally esy kameeny hoty hi na, k free ke daro jab b milly to Schwarzenegger say kam to koi pasand ati he ni.. to in short mera acha khasa kabara hony wala tha,, hamry friendship group my 3 Local Mawatin Arabic b shamil thy, jab party suba 4 bajy apny ihtetam ko ponchy to un my mera sab say acha dost (acha wo is leye tha k mujy hamesha free my daroo pelata tha,, per sala bachi k mamly my kanjoos he tha) us ny mujy apny car say aik bottle nikal k de, jis may bohot he garaaa sa kuch liquid tha, mujy kehny laga k ye Khajoor ke Vine hi, 13 years purani, meri taraf say tummy gift, per aik bat kan khool k sun lo. Ye us time he pena jab koi larki pass ho aur 30ml say zeyada sochna b ni,, any how, my ny alwadai kalamat adda karny my dair na lagai q k my full talli ho chukka tha aur dar rode k darmiyan my he na gir paro,

    Agly din jab utha to naha dho k my Dubai ke taraf kooch karny ko teyar tha,, to pata ni kia mood my aaya k khajoor ke darro apny bag my rakh de, jab my chacha ke taraf poncha to pata chala k chachi ke walid e buzurguwar Kaza Ilahi say Duniya say he kooch kar chuky hi aur wo abi k abi Pakistan jaa rahy hi, mujy uno ny apni chabi thamai,, oyyeeeeeeeeee woooooo nii.. flat ke chabi thamai, aur khisak pary,
    Mera full type mood off k beta Sam is say acha to Ajman my he tha, sab friends to thy na,, bas je.. socha k jesy tesy 2 din guzaro ga aur nikal paro ga,
    Sham koi aur phir raat aaye.. my ny pizza magwaya aur pata ni kia mood my aaya, thori c khajoor ke wine nikali aur pee le,, usy peena kia tha.. bakaida chabana para, yaar 10 mint my my full talli aur Janab Babu Rao je kissi 222 ke tarha agg barsany ko teyar, my ny shorts pehni hoi thi, nechy no underwear to mery short ka tent bana para tha,, abi my soch he raha tha k bahi bell hoi, my ny kaha beta jani., aj to tu geya,, socha k halka say darwaza khool k kaho ka k chacha Pakistan gay hy aur darwaza band,, per jesy he halka darwaza khola,, mery hush he ur gay,, ab pata ni ye daro ke waja thi k us husn ke devi ka kamal tha, my to un ke ankho my he dekhta raha aur darwaza khud ba khudh khul geya, mujy ye b maloom ni tha k ye husn pari hy kon, jesy he wo ander ke taraf aye, my ny darwaza band keya aur us k pechy chal para ,, wo flat k ander khari chachi ko awazin dain rahi thi,, my foran he pechy say us k sath chipak geya, aur us ke neck ko chomny laga,, ab ye itni himmat muj my kaha say aye.. my khud ni tha janta,, lazim ye us kambakht Khajoor ke wine ka asar tha my us ke back neck pe paglo ke tarha kiss pe kiss karta jaa raha tha, aur mujy itna to hosh tha k wo koi churany ke bachny ke koshish ni kar rahi thi, usi time mujy uncle Shetan ka agla SMS aaya aur my ny usy ghuma k khud ko shafqat cheema samjty howe kehkaha lagaya, wo heran ho k meri taraf dekhny lagi, tab mujy kheyal aaya k kehkaha to tab lagaty hi jab wo bachny ke koshish kar rahi ho, per abi to wo mani hoi lag rahi hi , my ny chafkat chema ko need ke goli de aur ander k salman khan ko jagaya aur us k shoulders pakar k us k ghulab ke pankhario jesy hont chomny he wala tha k muj pe he bat ka inkeshaf howa k wo pehly he nechy bethi mery shorts nechy keye Janab Babu Rao je k sath chopa chati my mashgool hi, per mery hath us k sholders jo k us jag ape ni thy ke taraf bhar chukay thy aur mery hoonth us k honto ke talash my rawana ho chuky thy magar in dono chezo ko apni jag ape naa pa kar my esa gira k meri Ashwariya ray jo Babu Rao je jo moo may leye bethi thy k upper sy dusari taraf gura, aur mujy apni shaan my peesh keye jany waly kuch angareezy alfaaz sunai deye, aur tab mujy yakeen howa k my inta talli howa para hon k ni bta sakta.. my jab gira, to meri Ashwariya ny apny salloo ko sedha keya2 3 alfaz mazeed meri shaan my ada keya aur jhatky say meri shorts sarka de, shart utarny ka scene esa tha babu rao je jhatka khaa k tannnnnnnn kar k upper ko uthy, mujy us time tom & jerry yad aa gay aur my hasny laga, mery dil bahar gussy say chillai “What’s so funny?” my ny foran dono hath apny hoto pe rakhy k kahi meri Ashwariya gussa may aa k sallo ko choor k dubara apny ajy ke pas na chali jay..
    Phir meri Ashwariya dubara Mr. Babu Rao pe jhuki aur upper say nechy ka fasila bary hamwari say tay karny lagi, babu rao je pe upper kissi b zuban ka ye pehla safar tha mujy laga k jesy my asman pe phonch geya hon, abi asman pe theek say pohoncha b ni tha k pata chala k my asman pe ni poncha mujy zameen may he tarry nazar aa rahy hy ,, q k jab my gura tha to meri Purpari (forehead) pe thori c choot lag gay thi, jis ke waja say aik chota sa Allo namodar ho chukar tha.. aur umeed the k din tak ye allo itna bara ho jay ga k agar gobbi my dala jay to 4 bandy roty khaa lay .. any how, meri jan e man apna kaab bari khoobsorti say sar anjam day rahy thy, my apni ankho k jharoko ko band keye mazzy ke wadi ke sair my masroof tha k mujy halki halki ajeez c smell apny naak k bilkul nazdeek mehsoos hony lagi, ankhy kholi to us ke bilkul naggi choot mery moo k bilkul samny thi, mujy us time wo choot kisssi vanilla ice cream say zeyada achi lagi, per my usy vanilla ke tarha ni chatny laga, my ussy desi barf ka gola samaj k chatny laga,, hum dono us time bilkul six nine ke position my thy,, ye sab itni jaldi aur achanak howa tha k mujy apna aapp us 3rd class story ke hero ke tarha laga jis may larki aik mint my chudwany k leye teyar ho jati hi, tab my ny socha k ni boss,, us kahani my b kuch hakikat ho ge he,, warna my he to duniya ka pehla lucky person ni ho na.. my apni socho my gum Vanilla taste ka golla khany my masroof tha k us ny meri Popcon ko chora aur muj say meri vanilla cheen ke cone k upper lagany ko teyar ho gay, uffffffffffffffffff yaar kia feeling thi,, ab pata ni wo daroo ke feeling the k sex ke,, mery leye to life ke pehly choot thi us ny meri popcon ko hath my pakar k 3 steps my apni vanilla ice cream k andar ghusara, aur pora he ander lay gay,, aur popcon pe beth ke esy round round circle banany lagi ice cream scoop say ice cream nikali jati hi, babu rao pehly he daro ke waja say full garma garam howa para tha magar may ny life ke phli vanilla ice cream dekhi ko us say b garam thi,, thori dair circle karny k bad wo bakaida upper nechy hony lagi, 5 mint karny k bad wo babo rao ko ander rakhty howe he muj pe lety aur bari maharat k sath mujy apny upper lita leya k babu rao ice cream my he raha, may aram say us k upper leet geya bary mazy say.. koi 20 sec wait karny k bad wo kehny lagi, “ I think we are fucking , right? “ my thora sa sharminda howa, aur mujy yaad aaya k my to is time chudai kar raha hon.. my foran sedha howa,, aur socha, k Sali kia sochti hi k mujy chudai karni ni aati,, my ny jhatka lagany k leye jab halka sa pechy howa to babu rao halka sa bahir aa geya, jab ander ko jhatka lagaya to us ke aik cheekh nilki , my ny socha k haaa ab pata chala,, magar agly he lamhy mery moo pe 5 ungalio ka nishan par chukar tha,, wo foran mery nechy say nikli aur gussy say meri shan my kucn angareezi alfaz ka izafa kar k kehny lagi “ that was my ASS not the fucking pussy, you stupid” tab mujy pata chala k my ny babu rao ko us ke pussy ke bajay ass my ghusa deya tha aur pussy k gelly hony ke waja say babu rao b gila ho chukka tha is leye aik he jhatky my ander chala geya,, wo samaj gay k ash ka sallo is time full tunn hy is leye mujy nechy lataya aur upper beth k meri esy hilny lagi jesy my us ke ni wo meri chudai kar rahi hi.. pehly ny thora sharminda howa,, phir socha., k kee farak panda hy… ye kon sa pehly bar bisti hoi hi jo mehsoos karo, koi 15 ya 20 mint tak wo meri chudai ,, oooooh,, mera matlab hi apni chudari karwati rahi, sahi time ka andaza ni kar saka q k my full tunn tha, Sali 30ml b esy chari k my apni blue label k 6 peg bhool geya,aur jaha tak mera andaza hi my us k ander he farig howa,, wo wesy he mery upper let gay,

    Phir meri ankh suba takreban 9 bajy khuli to dekha k aik chachi k ghar kam karn wali kaali c Pilipino larki jis ko hamesha dekh k he mujy ghin atti thi muj say chipak k soo rahi hi,, my gussay say pechy hatta, to wo b uth gay,, aur mujy kiss karny k leye apny galeez hont agy lany ke koshish ke jis say mujy ubkai aai ,, shukar hi ulti ni aye warna us ka galeez chehra mazeed galeez ho jata, wo gussa say uthi aur naggi he meri pent pakri aur us my say 500 Dhs nikal k kehny lagi k normaly wo 1000 leti hi per night,, per tumhary uncle k ghar kam karti ho is leye tummy discount keya,, tab muj pe ye hakekat khuli ke my issy sari rat ashwariya samaj k salman khan bana raha
    Us time mera dil keya k my dewar pe takkar maro. Gussy say dewar pe aik bar sar mara to yaad aaya k raat ka aallo pehy say bara ho chukka hi aur dewar b bilkul isssi jaga lagi hi jis say aik dard ke leher uthy aur mujy dewar pe sar pathakny ka irada tark karma para,

    Mery tajarbat may aik aur tajarby ka izafa ho chukka rha

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    mazaa aa gya dear koshish kartay raho aik din pappu bachi bhi milay gi.

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    Psand karny ka bohot shukrya

    jald he aur b stories share karo ga

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    کہانی بہت اچھی تھی،مجھے بہت پسند آئی۔

    کچھ باتیں غور طلب ہیں،وہ میں یہاں آپ کو بتا دیتا ہوں۔

    کہانی میں کوئی وقفہ نہیں ہے۔ فل سٹاپ اور کامے لگائے گئے ہیں مگر شاید کسی کسی جگہ صرف ان سے بات نہیں بنتی ۔ نئی لائن بریکٹ وغیرہ کا بھی استعمال کرنا چاہیئے۔
    کیونکہ آپ کہانی ایک مکالمے کی طرح سنا رہے ہیں،ان باتوں کی اشد ضرورت ہے۔
    ایسا لگتا ہے کہ ایک ہی ہی جملے میں کہانی لکھی گئی ہو۔
    بعض اوقات سمجھ نہیں آتا کہ یہ جملہ یہاں ختم ہے یا چل چلا رہا ہے۔
    یہ لفظ اس جملے کا ہے یا پچھلی بات سے جڑا ہے۔
    جہاں ایک بات ختم وہاں نئی لائن شروع کریں۔ جہاں ڈائیلاگ ہوں وہاں مکالمے کے انداز میں لکھیں۔
    کہانی کو صحفے کے درمیان کی بجائے بائیں جانب ہی رکھیں۔
    اگر کہانی اور الفاظ کو دیکھا جائے تو بہت اعلیٰ۔ مزاح اچھا تھا،خیالات بہت شوخ اور زرخیز تھے۔
    اس میں کوئی بھی شک نہیں کہ کہانی بہت اچھی ہے۔
    بس یہ باریکیاں اس کے حسن کو چار چاند لگا دیں گی۔

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    Khahani pasand karny pe sab ka bohot shukriya ada karta hon,,

    aur khas ul khaas Faisal bhai ka.. ap ka comment dekh k reallt itna acha laga k bta ni sakta,, really, aur sure next time may mazeed behtari lany ke koshish karo ga,,

    Faisal bhai comment ka bohot bohot shukriya.. really really really ap ka comment dekh k itna acha laga k may beyan ny kar sakta..

    once again thanks ever one

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    ڈئیر! آپ جلد از جلد اس کہانی کے اگلے حصے کو اردو میں لکھیں۔
    یہ بہت اچھی کہانی ہے،اسے اردو سیکشن میں ہونا چاہیئے۔

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    Hahaha bro 👌👌😂😂😂 Kia Kamal ka style ha Yar tumhara it was so funny mujhy b comment karny PE majboor Kar Dya zabardast Yar bss aik afsos ha Kahani complete ni Hui jese KY hota ha aksar e achi kahani uncomplete hoti ha lekin phr b Kamal ki story the

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